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What do you think of my ancient warrior story? My story is set in ancient times when the warlike brutal Roman empire is trying to conquer the Kingdom of Germania. The heroes of this story are Germans while the Romans are the villains. The protagonist of my story is the German prince Arminius. He is a knight. He is also prince of the Kingdom of Germania. He is the son of Segimer who is currently the King of the Kingdom of Germania. But the ancient Greeks are also villains in this story. The Greeks will help the Romans in fighting the Kingdom of Germania. The Romans made an alliance with all of the ancient Greek city states. One of the Greeks who will help the Romans fight the Germans is the warrior Achilles. Anyways, let me begin to separate the Romans, the Greeks, and the Germans. I will also tell you who these three races are. The ancient Greeks are warlike peoples who are brutal and practice toxic macho masculinity. The only things that their men do is go to war, kill innocents in wars, take slaves and sex slaves in wars, womanize when they are home, beat their wives and their children, and get drunk. Ancient Greek males are alpha males. An example of ancient Greek males having these negative characteristics is who they were during the wars between the Greeks and the Trojans. During the Trojan war, the Greek male warriors killed a lot of innocents and turned many Trojan women into sex slaves. The Greek king Agamemnon turned many Trojan women into his sex slaves. Achilles is also like Agamemnon but Achilles is worse. Achilles also turned many Trojan women into his sex slaves but he is worse than Agamemnon in that he is brutal in torturing and killing Trojan warriors. Achilles brutally killed Hector the Prince of Troy in a duel to the death. Then Achilles desecrated Hector's corpse. A Trojan prince by the name of Paris was right about Achilles being a macho war loving dog. Agamemnon is also a macho war loving dog. Ancient Greek women are masculine. They are very strong females who fight men. Ancient Greek women have no rights to get out of the house. Ancient Greek males treat ancient Greek females as nothing more than baby making servants. In an ancient Greek family, a father rules over everyone with complete power to the point that the father can sell every member of the family to slavery. As a people, the ancient Greeks are uncivilized warlike macho hedonistic xenophobic anarchic warriors who hate foreigners, look down on foreigners, are rebellious against their kings, are greedy in political power, are into orgies, cheats on their wives, and are brutal. Also, ancient Greek kings are addicted to having many concubines. The ancient Romans are also like the Greeks because the ancient Romans are culturally the same as ancient Greeks. The ancient Romans are warlike peoples who are brutal and practice toxic macho masculinity. The only things that Roman men do is go to war, kill innocents in wars, take slaves and sex slaves in wars, womanize when they are home, beat their wives and their children, and get drunk. Ancient Roman males are alpha males. An example of ancient Roman males having these negative characteristics is who they were during the wars between the Romans and the Carthaginians. During the Punic wars, the Roman male warriors killed a lot of innocents such as Carthaginians and turned many Carthaginian women into their sex slaves. The ancient Romans also genocided the Carthaginians despite the fact that the ancient Romans are the ones who started the Punic wars. The ancient Romans were the aggressors in the Punic wars while Carthage was just defending itself. The Roman prince Scipio Africanus desecrated Hannibal Barca's corpse after Scipio killed Hannibal in a duel. Hannibal Barca was once a king of Carthage. Ancient Roman women are masculine. They seem to be very strong females who fight men. They also have more rights than ancient Greek females. For example, ancient Roman women had the right to get out of the house. Still, ancient Roman females have far less rights than ancient Roman males. In an ancient Roman family, a father rules over everyone with complete power to the point that the father can sell every member of the family to slavery. As a people, the ancient Romans are uncivilized warlike macho hedonistic xenophobic anarchic warriors who hate foreigners, look down on foreigners, are rebellious against their kings, are greedy for political power, are into orgies, cheats on their wives, and are brutal. Also, ancient Roman kings are addicted to having concubines. Also, ancient Romans tend to assassinate their emperors and their political rivals due to ancient Romans being greedy for political power. Anyways, ancient Greeks and ancient Romans are animals. The ancient Greeks and the ancient Romans treat their slaves very horribly. Ancient Greeks and ancient Romans are addicted to having slaves. Slaves far outnumber Greeks in ancient Greece. Slaves also far outnumber Romans in ancient Rome. In ancient Greece, slaves are not Greeks and have to be that. In ancient Rome, slaves are not Romans and have to be that. In both ancient Greek laws and ancient Roman laws, slaves can be raped and brutalized as they were nothing more than objects with no human rights to the ancient Greeks and to the ancient Romans. The ancient Greeks are perverts. They engage in orgies especially in the temples of the goddess Aphrodite. They also go out in public naked a lot of times. They also castrate little foreign boys in order to turn them into eunuchs. The ancient Romans are also perverts. They engage in orgies especially in the temples of the goddess Venus. They also go out in public naked a lot of times. They also castrate little foreign boys in order to turn them into eunuchs. But the Romans are far worse than ancient Greeks in some aspects because the Romans love to turn their slaves into gladiators and force the gladiators to fight in arenas to the death for the entertainment of the Roman people. The Greeks are racist and xenophobic to peoples who are not Greeks. The Greeks think of peoples who are not Greeks as inferior savages. The Greeks call all non-Greeks as "barbarians" which means inferior illiterate savages. In ancient Greece, the Greeks often start brutal violent riots against all non-Greeks who are not slaves. The Romans are racist and xenophobic to peoples who are not Greeks or Romans. The Romans think of peoples who are not Greeks or Romans as inferior savages. The Greeks and the Romans call all non-Greeks "barbarians" which means inferior illiterate savages. By the way, ancient Romans and ancient Greeks are different when it comes to the weapons they used in wars. Ancient Romans use short swords and shields while ancient Greeks use spears and shields. The ancient Greeks and the ancient Romans also use bronze armors in combat. These armors cover their heads, their lower legs(the legs below the thighs), and their torso but not the necks, the thighs, and the arms. The helmets of the ancient Greeks and the ancient Romans have plumes. As for religion, the ancient Greeks and the ancient Romans are polytheistic. The gods and goddesses of the ancient Greeks and the ancient Romans are amoral gods who are petty, selfish, and act like humans. As for the Germans, they are the people of the Kingdom of Germania. The Germans are a civilized race of people who are known for their love of adventure. The Kingdom of Germania is one of the most prosperous and one of the most technologically advanced civilizations in the entire world. One of the greatest technological achievements of the Kingdom of Germania is that the Germans have the best armor technology in the entire world. This is also due to the fact that German metallurgy is the most advanced in the entire world. Compared to the rest of the world, Germans armors are entirely made of steel. German armors range from beautiful, scary, and funny. Germans armors are the most detailed in the entire world. German armors also include beautiful full plate armors that are entirely made of steel and these steel full plate armors are exclusively used by the knights. These armors cover the whole bodies of the knights. Another testament to the technological achievements of the Germans is that the Germans have the strongest, most complex, and most advanced castles and systems of fortresses in the entire world. One time, there was a German castle with only one person inside the German castle and that person was the princess of the castle. Also, there was a Roman army that was composed of 8 legions. Each of the legions has 6000 Roman legionnaires. This Roman army composed of 8 legions tried to besiege the German castle but due to the advanced technology of the German castle such as its advanced mechanisms, the German princess inside the castle managed to single-handedly defend the castle and annihilate 5 legions of the Roman army despite her being the only person in the castle. This caused the Romans to give up and retreat. The castle was not damaged one bit. Now back to the knights. The knights are one of the strongest, fiercest, and bravest warriors in the entire world. They are the only warriors of the Kingdom of Germania. The knights are a nobility class of the Kingdom of Germania. The knights are a warrior class. The knight class includes both males and females. All knights such as males and females are brutally trained from the age of 5 as a fierce brave highly skilled warrior. All knights such as males and females are expected to get knight warrior training, be warriors, engage in fights to the death, engage in warrior battles, and go to wars. A male knight or a female knight who refuses to be a warrior is legally killed by the government of the Kingdom of Germania. At the age of 13, the knights are already expected to fight in wars and engage in fights to the death. This knight warrior training that starts from the age of 5 includes training and education in these various skills and various knowledge: 1. Boxing 2. Kicking martial arts that involves the use of the knees and the whole legs. 3. Wrestling 4. Swordsmanship martial arts such as the use of the two-handed longsword. 5. Military tactics and military strategies 8. Psychology 9. Horseback martial arts 10. Horseback riding 11. Various languages such as German and foreign languages. 12. Dietary discipline 13. Christianity 14. Weapon-based martial arts such as dagger martial arts, spear martial arts, polearm martial arts, etc. 15. Unarmed martial arts 16. Survival skills such as survival in the jungle. 17. Assassinations 18. Archery 19. Stealth arts and sciences 20. Strength training 21. Bodybuilding 22. History 23. Politics The list goes on. The knights also train as individuals and also as an army. The knights are one of the world's greatest warriors as individuals and as an army. The knights are highly disciplined and have great team work. But they are also one of the world's greatest warriors when it comes to fighting individually. There are many cases of lone knights destroying enemy warriors that are more than 70. When it comes to combat, knights can be heavy infantry units, light infantry units, heavy cavalry units, light cavalry units, and commando units. The horses that the knights use when the knights are being cavalry units are fully covered by steel full plate armor. Also, most of the best military commanders of the Kingdom of Germania come from the knight class. The weapon that is commonly associated with knights is the two-handed longsword. This is a pointy double-edged sword with a long blade and a long hilt. The sword has a guard on the right side and another guard on the left side. The guards give the sword's user good protection. The sword's hilt is long so the sword can be used by two hands. The knights are extremely skilled when it comes to using the two-handed longsword. This is their favorite weapon when it comes to engaging in duels to the death. Knights love to engage in duels to the death. Knights often fight and kill enemies they hate or deem evil in one vs one melee fight to the death. These enemies of the knights include non-German warriors, barbarian savages, pirates, bandits, mercenaries, rebel terrorists, foreign imperialists, other knights, etc. A desire for revenge is also a reason why knights engage in duels to the death against their enemies. Most of the duels that the knights engage in are where the knights have no armors or shields. The knights are the greatest duelists in the entire world when it comes to duels to the death. This is because the knights trained in various martial arts from the age of five especially in the martial art of using the two-handed longsword. This is also because knights started dueling to the death at the age of 13. Another reason why the knights are the greatest duelists in the entire world is because the knights have a martial arts culture. The knights are passionate about training in and learning about martial arts. The knights love to make martial arts. The knights love to experiment and theorize about martial arts techniques and martial arts science. The knights also love engaging in knightly tournaments. Knightly tournaments are events held by German nobles in the Kingdom of Germania. Knightly tournaments host group vs group on foot melee fights, on foot melee duels, horseback melee duels, and jousting. Only knights are allowed to participate in knightly tournaments. The greatest duelist that has ever existed in the history of my story's universe was the German knight Lancelot. He has a weapon called the Grey Princess which is a two-handed longsword. Lancelot lived in a time that is completely different from that of Prince Arminius. Lancelot lived and died before Prince Arminius was born. Lancelot also has four platonic friends that are from the German peasant class and not from the knight class. These are Lancelot's platonic friends: 1. An assassin girl 2. A boy martial artist 3. A boy engineer 4. A girl merchant. Lancelot went on an adventure with his four platonic friends where they explored the whole world. They traveled to Africa, Mesopotamia, India, China, the Americas, Antarctica, Indochina, etc. Since Lancelot is a knight, he also passionately lived by the code of Chivalry which encouraged knights to be brave vigilantes. As Lancelot and his four platonic friends travel the whole world, Lancelot defeats many kinds of very strong opponents in duels to the death despite him having no armors or shields at all. The very strong opponents that he defeated and killed include a rajput champion, a shaolin champion, a youxia champion, a zande warrior champion, an Apache warrior champion, a Comanche warrior champion, a Maori warrior champion, an ancient imperial Assyrian warrior king, an Egyptian Medjay warrior, etc. In all of the duels to the death that Lancelot engaged in, he always has no armors or shields when he dueled his opponents to the death and the only weapon he used is the Grey Princess. Lancelot also fought and killed many criminals such as bandits, pirates, etc. Knights also lead a very strict diet. Most knights do not eat excessively in order to stay fit as a warrior and have the physique of a warrior. Most knights are tall and muscular. Most knights are not skinny or fat. Also, knights lived by the code of Chivalry which is a collection of behaviors that knights are expected to live by. These are the rules of the code of Chivalry: 1. Never commit immoral acts such as theft, murder, extortion, etc. 2. Never bully, insult, harass, or physically harm innocents. 3. Always help innocents when they are in danger or are being harmed by evil beings. Rescue innocents from danger or evil beings. 4. Fight and kill every evil being. This tells knights to be vigilantes. 5. Protect your nation from all dangers and evil men. You must sacrifice your life for every person(This includes nobilities, peasants, and every one in your nation.) of your nation. 6. Be brave against all dangers and all evil men. 7. Love and protect your spouse or lover. Also, be sweet to your spouse or lover. 8. Never cheat on your spouse or lover. 9. Be passionately monogamous. 10. Never engage in casual sex. 11. Never engage in extramarital sex. 12. Never engage in orgies. The list goes on. The knights followed every rule of Chivalry passionately. Now back to the Germans as a whole people. When it comes to personality, these are the German peoples: 1. They are extremely monogamous. 2. They never engage in casual sex. 3. They never engage in extramarital sex. 4. They never engage in orgies. 6. They never cheat on their spouses or lovers. 5. They are friendly. 6. They are not racist or xenophobic. They believe all humans are equal. 7. They are very open to people who are gay, lesbian, and bisexual. 8. They never engage in slavery. For the German peoples, slavery is an evil abomination that goes against equality of all human beings. Germans behave and think this way due to Christianity. 9. German peasants tend to live simple lives. 10. They are devout Christians. As for religion, German people believe in and practice Christianity. German people are devout Christians. Christianity is a monotheistic religion focusing on good vs evil. In Christianity, there is only one god that the Germans worship and this god is omniscient, omnipresent, and omnipotent. The Christian god is also always perfect in morality. The Christian god has an enemy which is the Devil. The Devil is omniscient, omnipresent, and omnipotent. The Devil is pure evil. In Christianity, the Christian god originated everything that is innocent and rational while the Devil originated everything that is evil and wrong. The Christian god is served by angels while the Devil is served by lesser demons. In Christianity, good humans go to Heaven after good humans die while evil humans go to Hell after evil humans die. Heaven is a place of happiness while Hell is a place of torment, terror, despair, and sadness. Christianity is about doing moral deeds while avoiding doing immoral deeds. By the way, Christianity has heavily influenced Chivalry. By the way, these are all the nobilities of the Kingdom of Germania. As the numbers go from 1 and up, the lower rank the nobility goes. For example, the King is in number 1 while the Prince is in number 2 so the Prince is lower in rank than the King. If you see two nobility ranks of opposite genders side by side, that means none of them are lower or higher than each other. In other words, they are equal. For example, the Queen and the King are side by side, which means they are equal in rank. Anyways, this is the list: 1. King - Queen 2. Prince - Princess 3. Duke - Duchess 4. Marquis - Marquise 5. Count - Countess 6. Viscount - Viscountess 7. Baron - Baroness 8. Lord - Lady 9. Knight - Knight Again, the main protagonist of my story is Prince Arminius. Arminius will be leading the armies of the Kingdom of Germania against the Roman empire and its Greek allies. Prince Arminius has a weapon called the Valiant Edge which is a two-handed longsword. The main antagonist of my story is Germanicus who is a racist hedonistic genocidal warlike Roman military commander. Germanicus genocided the Celtic peoples. Another great antagonist of my story is the Roman emperor Augustus. He is a brutal conqueror who wants to enslave every non-Roman in the whole world and also impose Roman culture on every non-Roman nation. Another part of my story will focus on another German knight and this knight's name is Siegfried. He lived and died in a time that is different from that of Arminius and Lancelot. Siegfried lived and died before Arminius was born but lived and died after Lancelot lived and died. Like Lancelot, Siegfried is a great duelist when it comes to duels to the death. Siegfried killed many of his enemy knights in duels to the death. In all of his duels to the death against his enemy knights, Siegfried has no armors or shields and his only weapon is the Arsfreind(pronunciation: ars - freynd) which is a two-handed longsword. After Siegfried's many duels to the death against his enemy knights, Siegfried was captured and enslaved by the Romans. The Romans then forced Siegfried to become a gladiator for the entertainment of the Roman peoples. Due to Siegfried's knight training, knight experiences, and his experiences in brutal duels to the death against other knights, Siegfried became the greatest, fiercest, strongest, and deadliest gladiator in ancient Roman history. In Siegfried's life as a gladiator, Siegfried was forced to use gladiator weapons, gladiator equipment, and gladiator armors. In the Roman arenas, Siegfried single-handedly handedly battled, defeated, and killed lions, smilodon populators, wolf packs, titanoboas, terror crocs(Deinosuchus), bull groups, kangaroos, cheetahs, panthers, bears, tyrannosauruses, velociraptors, spinosauri, quetzalcoatluses, dilophosaurus dinosaurs, other gladiators(volunteers and those forced to be gladiators), etc. In Siegfried's life as a gladiator, Siegfried was also forced into water arenas by the Romans. In the water arenas, Siegfried single-handedly battled, defeated, and killed Megalodon sharks, piranhas, basilosauruses, liopleurodons, sea scorpions(jaekelopterus), Dunkleosteus animals, etc. Water arenas are very wide and very large Roman arenas where the fighting grounds are in very deep water. In Siegfried's life as a gladiator, Siegfried killed many champion gladiators. In a Roman arena, Siegfried also fought, defeated, and killed the Roman emperor Hadrian in a duel to the death in front of many Roman peoples after Hadrian challenged Siegfried in a duel to the death in front of many Roman peoples. Hadrian is a great Roman general and great Roman soldier. Hadrian is a xenophobic racist Roman who hated non-Romans and non-Greeks. Hadrian is also very obsessed with Greeks and Greek culture. Then Siegfried and his allies(gladiators and slaves) made a successful escape from the Roman empire. Siegfried and his allies(gladiators and slaves) led a successful guerilla rebellion against Roman armies. Siegfried and his rebel allies(gladiators and slaves) defeated and annihilated many Roman legions and many Roman armies in many battles. The Romans realized that Siegfried is not just a great individual warrior but also a great military commander so the Romans hired the help of the great Greek mercenary warrior Phaidriades and his formidable Greek mercenary group. Phaidriades is also a Pankration champion and a Greek hoplite. But even Phaidriades and his mercenary group were no match for Siegfried and his rebel group. Siegfried and his rebel group annihilated Phaidriades' mercenary group. Siegfried fought, defeated, and killed Phaidriades in a duel to the death. After Siegfried and his rebel group fought the Romans and their allies, Siegfried escaped from the Roman empire and returned to the Kingdom of Germania. So what do you think of my warrior story? Is there anything missing? What needs to be changed? What characters should I add? Do you like the story and the characters?